雅思大作文的写作一直是各位“烤鸭”比较头疼的问题。原因之一便是写作的思路难以把握。受制于固有的中文思维模式,很多考生都是被冠以“do not express idea clearly”或“do not finish the task”这样的标签。下面我们将以难度较大的“discuss both views”题型为例进行讲解。
01 写作误区一:双方观点平分秋色
很多考生只注意到了“discuss both views”而忽略了后面的“give your own opinion”。因而在写作时,对两种观点没有做出具有倾向性的区别,只是很“客观”的陈述了两种观点的好处。这样写将会丢掉不少内容分数,因为缺少了“自己的观点”这一重要的内容。
02 写作误区二:只分别陈述,没有相应的对比
题中给出的两种观点,肯定各有利弊。如果在考试中考生只是简单的分段对每一种观点进行的陈述,并没有做出对比,然后就直接做出一个具有倾向的选择,文章的质量将大打折扣,在内容和逻辑上都将丢掉宝贵的分数。
写作逻辑
简单式:
Introduction
View One
View Two
Your Opinion
Conclusion
这种写作之所以简单是因为:1)不需要在introduction中表明自己的观点,降低了表述的难度;2)思路简单,只需要将两种观点分开论述即可,不需要复杂的思维过程;3)节省时间,可以直接动笔。但这种写作具有明显的漏洞:1)缺少比较的过程,不容易获得考官的青睐;2)对于语言程度不是很好的考生来说,很容易让自己的观点看起来混乱,不清晰,并因此而丢掉分数。
所以,对于想考取理想分数的考生来说,这样一种“省时省力”的写作方法并不值得推荐。接下来,朗阁培训中心的专家将为大家推荐一种备受考官青睐的写作方法:
对比式:
Introduction
One advantage of view one, compared with view two
Another advantage of view one, compared with view two
One advantage of view two
Conclusion
如果考生觉得View One的观点更好,则可以用上述方法来论述:
首先,在introduction中清晰表明自己的立场。如:All possible benefits brought by View One convince me to promote/support it.
其次,分段列举View One的两点好处,并与View Two做对比。如:Doing XXXX (view one) could evoke students’ further interests on learning relative subjects. However, doing XXXX (view two) may stop students from digging out their potentials. 在此,需要强调View One好处,以及View Two的弊端,并做出相关解释说明。
再次,作为迂回(折中)段,可以列举一个View Two的一个好处。如:Regardless of mentioned limitations, View Two does have one merit, which is … 并解释或举例说明为什么View Two具有这种优点。
最后,在结尾段强调自己的选择即可。
案例说明:
剑桥真题7-Test 2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Introduction: 清晰表达自己的观点:I prefer a flexible punishment to a fixed one.
One advantage of the flexible punishment with comparison: a flexible punishment could be an effective solution to reduce criminal rate, as it is able to eliminate some triggers of criminal behavior. Compared with it, a fixed punishment cannot avoid potential crimes, since it neglects the real reason of those committed criminal behaviors.
论点一:灵活地判罚可以有效的预防犯罪,从而降低犯罪率;但固定一致的判罚不可以,因为其没有从根本上杜绝诱发犯罪的原因。
Another advantage of flexible punishment with comparison: Not everybody deserves the serious sentence if he or she was forced to do it. However, giving criminals fixed punishment deprives their opportunity of rehabilitation.
论点二:如果他们是被迫做出犯罪行为,那就应该给他们一个改过自新的机会。但一味的重罚剥夺了他们的这项权利。
One advantage of fixed punishment: Admittedly, fixed punishment is an option of reducing criminal rate in a short-term, as everybody would try their best to avoid punishing. Conversely, it does not work as a long-term approach.
折中:固定的惩罚可以在短期内降低犯罪率,但是不是一个长久之计。
在本段,我们需要肯定固定惩罚的好处,但是不要过度肯定,依然需要隐射出其中暗含的问题。
Conclusion: Considering those two impacts the flexible punishment has on reducing criminals, I strongly insist that we should advocate such punishment, not only to give another chance to those criminals, but also to prevent potentials crimes via removing criminal triggers.
在结尾段,再次强调灵活判罚的好处,并重申自己的观点。
思路总结:本文着重讲解了discuss both views这种写作题型的答题技巧。在此,做出简短总结:在开头段表明自己的观点,继而列举出该观点的2个好处,并与另一观点做对比;然后折中肯定对方观点的优势(但仍需指出其中的问题),最后结尾段重申自己的观点。
通过对过往多年题目的分析,专家认为包含对比,并在文中已明确表达出自己观点立场的文章很受外籍考官的青睐。因为这样的写作更具综合性,逻辑上也更加紧密。同时,不断的对比可以从更多的方面展示出考生在语言,尤其是词汇上的积累。因为,对于众多胸怀梦想的“烤鸭”来说,这种写作更容易获得高分。
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